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    dots Submission Name: The Road Aheaddots

    Author: heartless_
    Elite Ratio:    2.46 - 284/251/154
    Words: 320
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsThe Road Aheaddots

    There once was a day, I didnt looked before I lept,
    Once I wasnt cautious in all I did.
    Before long though I just let life take hold,
    Never thought I was wrong.

    If I was lead to love, well maybe I was happy,
    Till he always left me crying in the road.
    I never thought to question it all.
    It never mattered how many times,
    I made the same mistake.

    This had been one long road,
    A journey of pain and sorrow
    Too many tears to count,
    All the times I just wanted it to end.

    I came to a split in my road,
    Didnt know what to choose,
    Do I stay on the path Ive been on?
    Or should I go the path unknown?

    Ive been so torn with what to do,
    I knew if I went with the familiar I would break,
    But I just couldnt see ahead the new.

    It didnt take long though for me to know,
    After running into one too many walls,
    I started to go into the unknown.

    One step at a time I left all I knew,
    Or thought I knew about myself,
    I set out to once and for all change my life
    Its different this time, this is for me.

    I want to be that happy girl again,
    The one who jumped before she thought,
    Ran carelessly through the rain laughing.
    Genuinely happy with who she was,

    These past few years, I dont even know
    Who is in the mirror staring back at me?
    Just an empty shell of a girl whos cried
    For all she has lost, for all she had hoped.
    All I see is just the body of who I was,
    Not the soul of myself, and that’s what Im after.
    I will go down whatever roads it takes to find my spirit again

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