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    dots Submission Name: Mother Nature Prophesiseddots
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    Author: LadyInRed88
    ASL Info:    19/f/MO
    Elite Ratio:    3.68 - 131/180/32
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
    Total Views: 1069
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    Description:
       This is just about the disgusting ways of the world and how we are all slowly tearing it apart.


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    dotsMother Nature Prophesiseddots
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    Our hands grew cold,
    She gave us the sun,
    And its rays of golden light...

    We wanted to dream,
    And wish for more,
    So she hung the stars in the sky..

    She saw what would become,
    And mountain streams-
    Formed inside her eyes...

    And the restless oceans-
    The rolling seas,
    Were made of the tears she cried...

    We blackened those waters,
    and blocked out the sun...
    Made ugly this Earth,
    As we polished our guns...
    Destroyed all the love,
    Welcomed the pain...
    Stood at our windows,
    And damned the rain...
    Built tall bulidings,
    Where trees stood first...
    Money became God-
    An insatiable thirst....

    Oh our hearts, they wandered,
    Our hate demised....

    Just as Mother Nature prophesised...




    Submitted on 2004-07-29 11:32:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Yeah, money and power seem to be driving this world (to its demise). This piece does raise some good points. I think you should expand on the prophesy more, although I do get do get a sense of what you mean (maybe). I enjoyed the read :)
    | Posted on 2004-07-31 00:00:00 | by nicelyJ | [ Reply to This ]
      I like how you illustrated our necessities, how they were delivered then how mankind is destroying them. I felt it was well written. Wonderful to read.
    | Posted on 2004-07-29 00:00:00 | by Cayman | [ Reply to This ]


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