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    dots Submission Name: lincoln logsdots

    Author: crashley
    Elite Ratio:    0.43 - 3/26/100
    Words: 92
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotslincoln logsdots

    a fake house
    build of old wobbling toys,
    lincoln logs i think

    the niches don't fit,
    the wood is swollen from being left
    in the sandbox
    and the rain

    the joints aren't smooth
    and i'm sure as hell that

    puffy with age and abandonment
    wood is not the only thing that swells
    all things of a common life,
    that we all face
    because it
    and continues on
    indifferent of us

    just breaks toys
    and childhood
    the rain swallows it all

    Submitted on 2011-05-08 22:56:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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