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    dots Submission Name: lincoln logsdots
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    Author: crashley
    Elite Ratio:    0.43 - 3/26/100
    Words: 92
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotslincoln logsdots
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    a fake house
    build of old wobbling toys,
    lincoln logs i think

    the niches don't fit,
    the wood is swollen from being left
    discarded
    in the sandbox
    and the rain

    the joints aren't smooth
    and i'm sure as hell that
    they
    are
    broken

    puffy with age and abandonment
    wood is not the only thing that swells
    all things of a common life,
    that we all face
    because it
    ticks
    ticks
    and continues on
    indifferent of us

    just breaks toys
    and childhood
    the rain swallows it all




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