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    dots Submission Name: Make Pretenddots

    Author: UnderlinedInRed
    ASL Info:    18/f/PA
    Elite Ratio:    4.24 - 196/262/123
    Words: 296
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       I wrote this the other day when a wave of emotions ran over me. I heard that my ex-boyfriend was visiting campus and suddenly I couldn't breath, I didn't want to see him but at the same time I did. It is an odd feeling, that maybe I did love him, even though I convinced myself for so long that loving him was impossible. How can you love someone that hurt you so much?

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    dotsMake Pretenddots

    Knowing that you are around,
    I can't breath,
    The earth is crashing down
    The rips and tides that hold me
    Right against the wall
    are pushing me to fall
    back in to you.
    Afraid of what you'll say if you see me,
    Point out that my heart won't stop beating
    when you are near me.
    whether from love or fear,
    I can't have you near
    Because you'll judge what isn't right
    Hold it against the time
    When you couldn't lead me to
    Your state of mind.
    This doesn't end in complacency,
    I'm unsure why though
    It seems like everyone else can fall in and out of love
    That the people who once meant the world to them,
    Are either happy memories, forever friends,
    Or forgiven souls and make-pretend.
    but you, you mean forever.
    You mean the months of waiting, of patience,
    Of never-ending guilt, will never leave me,
    As long as you are that two hour and a half drive away.
    Across state lines, inside my mind, you are still
    Just as close as you'll ever be.
    For if I run around the world, I'm sure you'll catch me
    This merry-go-round, make-believe,
    Isn't enough to calm the fact that your place in my life,
    Still scares the living shit out of me.
    And yet I look for you too,
    I look for your figure looming, laughing, holding me,
    For just the thought of you brings me comfort when I am ill,
    Brings me solace, even still.
    When I know I shouldn't,
    I know I'm simply looking in an effort to stop the pain,
    To see if you still feel the way I do,
    If you have changed enough to pursue.

    Maybe I was in love, once, a long time ago. I may never be again.

    Submitted on 2011-05-09 15:02:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hey (:

    ofhasdofuhsodlsdhfcvouijhndfcvjkmnfdcvijkmdfcvijk. I hope that's articulate enough to express how much I know what you mean? :D

    What I really like about this (apart from how I can so TOTALLY relate) is just how it's you running off emotion. It's like, you're saying how you feel yet at the same time you're thinking but in a slightly poetic fashion :P

    Ugh, apart from saying "I LOVE THIS" a countless amount of times, I don't think I can get any more constructive. Mostly because I'm just an emotion hoarding sook, but whatevs. DISCLAIMER: This comment holds about 0% help.

    But you've just portrayed this emotion in such a way that one can make their own connections and be like, "yup, been there done that" and yeah. One can really get a sense of how you're feeling and they're feelings that some people can relate to. That breathlessness and that moment when your eyes just go all funny as the rising feeling in your stomach collides with the heart palpitations.
    But you have to make it look like everything's cool.

    Me gusta.

    | Posted on 2011-05-10 00:00:00 | by EshyFishy | [ Reply to This ]
      can feel that holding the breath dilemma in here.....

    the poem is pretty straight on...but well worded...it's more about emotion than fancy words.....and always that meeting after a time...with someone we have broken up with...always a question as to how the two people will react to each other...

    i saw one of my exes one day...and said hi to her..we started talking for awhile...then i hugged her, wished her a happy birthday and walked away...i heard her let out a big sigh...later she told me she thought i was going to be angry at her..and start yelling at her...(that was her old boyfriend---he did that to her...so she expected it)

    we never know...and often our whole body and emotional mentality just simply react...we have so little control when it comes right down to it.

    this expresses that pretty well..

    oh, second line "I can't breathe"

    | Posted on 2011-05-09 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

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