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    dots Submission Name: Haradadots
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    Author: Porcelaine
    ASL Info:    27/F/Croatia
    Elite Ratio:    3.9 - 880/703/256
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angst
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    dotsHaradadots
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    ~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~

    All across the narrow -
    I am a burden.
    I call upon my pestilence
    And walk along the gallows.

    Straight from the pits
    The harrow smells
    And I fear it, I'm repulsed...
    It follows me.

    Deriving from it,
    I retrench under scrutiny -
    Tolerating crows
    And migrations of wolves.

    Dead tongues speak
    And old trees wither
    Yet I am alive -
    I retrace my lines in the mirror.

    Forgive me, tell me:
    Does a soul grow easily?
    Can a thought fall
    Like a star?

    I was wondering:
    Those doors are few
    And I am many.
    Will you come looking for me?

    I am barefoot.

    ~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~




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      I tried to look up Harada, and could not find a definition; I am not sure I understand the title.

    But I can understand the muse;

    " I retrench under scrutiny -
    Tolerating crows
    And migrations of wolves.

    Dead tongues speak
    And old trees wither
    Yet I am alive -
    I retrace my lines in the mirror."

    The mood of despair leers here, and we all have seen its' ugly face. We have no choice but to go on living, even when at times life denies us even the basic pleasures and feelings that make it worthwhile....

    It sometimes takes from us and fails to give back..

    and we struggle on, as if taking a meal without savor...

    Your work is always brilliant!
    | Posted on 2011-05-11 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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