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    dots Submission Name: Out My Windowdots
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    Author: Latin King
    ASL Info:    31/M/Los Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    2.39 - 104/232/145
    Words: 84
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsOut My Windowdots
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    There's a brick wall,
    Outside my window;
    It's a death fall,
    If I were an Emo.

    There's no visual,
    Of a society;
    Only criminals,
    Pain,
    And agony.

    Tragically I don't scope,
    Out the city,
    Nor cope,
    With my own pity,

    Out my window it's dead,
    Scenery exist only,
    In the imagination,
    Just altered,
    In my head.

    Nothing really to see,
    I know for a fact,
    Out my window,
    There's nothing,
    Awaiting for me.










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