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    dots Submission Name: FIGHT!!!dots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 152
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Longing
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    dotsFIGHT!!!dots
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    I wish for the day I wake up
    as the child I once was
    Re-living the feelings of love
    Returning to the home I hated yet loved all at once
    Longing for nothing more than to be wanted
    To be loved
    As I once was
    However now I live a shallow worthless life
    Condemed by my demons and fears
    Drawn in by the darkness
    Living a life of nothingness
    I am battling with my fears each day
    I fight till the death and thus far I've won
    Nevertheless, I can only be lucky for so long
    You have given me burdens I wish no one to ever have
    I live with rage only I, myself will ever understand!
    I simply wish for the day I can wake up...
    As the child I once was...
    Abused and broken... YES
    Loved and wanted... YES... this is all I long for




    Submitted on 2011-05-11 04:27:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I hope you dont see your life as 'worthless'. Knowing you like I do I can say you are a.very strong woman. And hard working full time, while getting A's in college. Your writing is a great talent you have also.
    | Posted on 2011-05-12 00:00:00 | by tas | [ Reply to This ]


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