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    dots Submission Name: crossroaddots
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    Author: Diablo Tapitio
    ASL Info:    30
    Elite Ratio:    3.08 - 85/111/62
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
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    dotscrossroaddots
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    I am starting to see clearly,
    I am coming through the haze.
    Scratching the suface of something infinate,
    as I melt away my days.

    I am on the verge of something,
    a crossroad in my head,
    I dont know about tomorrow,
    somethings are best left unsaid.

    The canyon that is between us,
    it grows larger every day.
    the flower is dying on the vine,
    and we have nothing left to say.

    Your once lit world now full of shadows,
    hiding skeletons of deciept.
    and vows torn and broken,
    you threw away the reciept.

    So I stand at this crossroad,
    with the devil on my side
    only god know where the roads lead,
    and the devil is my guide




    Submitted on 2011-05-12 21:59:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Seeing the picture of you with your guitar makes me think this could be an effective song that you've written.

    One suggestion if I may be so bold:

    change the last line to "with the devil as my guide"

    cheers.
    | Posted on 2013-01-13 00:00:00 | by timepet | [ Reply to This ]
      Sad, to have only the devil as a guide.
    The crossroads have other paths to follow and may lead to others that may have the path one is searching for.
    A good, but sad piece
    | Posted on 2011-05-13 00:00:00 | by DUSTYTU | [ Reply to This ]


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