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    dots Submission Name: Lydiadots
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    Author: nicodemous
    ASL Info:    7-5-82/M/Hell
    Elite Ratio:    5.58 - 283/221/121
    Words: 58
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsLydiadots
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    I am use to knowing my part
    To staying faithful to my role
    This is something you freed me from

    Shackled no more

    Allowed to be what I will be
    Truth in great comfort
    I humbly thank you

    And beg you please be patient
    As I continue to grow and discover who I really am..




    Submitted on 2011-05-14 17:57:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Straight forward, I enjoy it. What I get from the piece is a lot of relief. Maybe some reluctance in having admitted that you were helped to such an extent. The format is easy and it flows nicely, and I think a wide audience can connect because we all have that person we can say something like this to.
    | Posted on 2013-05-18 00:00:00 | by KotaNashi | [ Reply to This ]
      self knowledge, aside from an intimate knowledge of God, is the most important knowledge one may posses. often times it is another person that draws us out of ourselves, as it were. like the bird watcher losing the forest for the sparrow. we look so deep, get so stuck on us, that it takes another person to draw us out. the individual as the close up, but the outsider as the panoramic view. does that make sense? i haven't made sense all day i suppose.

    anyway, very well done.
    jp
    | Posted on 2011-05-20 00:00:00 | by rev.jpfadeproof | [ Reply to This ]
      I gather you are now free to respond without the constraints that would have caused you to swallow your responses and led to the birth of ulcers and stress.

    Discovering who you are is an important milestone in life. Without a reference point, it's impossible to know where you're going.
    | Posted on 2011-05-17 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      it is good when we can learn who we are, become what are going to be...and are able to do that while being with another person...often that person will not allow us to become ourselves, just part of the couple...

    i like this acknowledgement of that...

    the language in the poem is pretty straightforward, but to me..that often works better than flowering stuff with so much vocabulary and abstract metaphor that we just read it and say "what the heck was that?"

    there is impact here.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-05-14 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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