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Mending The Butterfly


Author: Themissingshado
ASL Info:    22/male/Seattle
Elite Ratio:    2.27 - 23 /52 /32
Words: 77
Class/Type: Random Thoughts /Longing
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Trust me I will always be here for you...


Mending The Butterfly



Do you feel anything
When I hold you
When you dream
Do you dream of us
Together
If you could see the emptiness
Would you try to feel that void

Cigarettes cold sweats and regrets
Keep me thinking of you
I call your name
But you don't hear me
But I know that you can feel me
If you let me
I will keep you safe
Just don't hurt me...okay?






Submitted on 2011-05-15 21:06:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I like it. It is like so many of my poems, love hurts!
| Posted on 2011-05-19 00:00:00 | by PrettyHeart | [ Reply to This ]


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