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    Author: KatyCatastrophe
    ASL Info:    14F, Usa
    Elite Ratio:    2.91 - 3/6/4
    Words: 74
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 457
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 436



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    dotsSlavedots
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    Pain, pain, go away.
    Take all my problems with you.
    I will not become a slave,
    To the razor that I use.
    I don't need a better life,
    Or more butterflies and rainbows.
    I just need to change myself
    Before I learn to love those.
    So before you even try to judge me,
    Or make a mockery of my pain.
    Take the time to stop and think
    Of what I go through every day.




    Submitted on 2011-05-17 22:56:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This poem has quite right attitude.
    How long one can wallow in self pity, that is pretty defeatist. The 'pain pain go away' style feels like baby-ish innocence. But, suddenly you grow up in the third line and refuse to be suppressed and judged by anything, even by your own overpowering instincts.

    This poem reveals a lot of internal conflict and it is apparent that the positives are winning... so, very nice, keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2011-05-18 00:00:00 | by Kaddish | [ Reply to This ]


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