Too Many Men
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Too Many Men
One man to take away the Lonely; Another man to be The Only, Replaced with one to fill the holes left by all those mates of "Soul" and then some more to even-Steven all the hurts and lies and treason... Start again, this time a Friend to sink the blade and twist it in. A new man to supply free dope; Another man to lend false hope. A few to party, dance and sing, then find one with a wedding ring: Throw it back and run away, Hide your face against the day. Swear there will be no more men until the full moon shines again... |
Submitted on 2011-05-18 23:11:11 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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Personally, I think that the full moon should be used to find men who would make a home out of a closet, or a pool out of a bath tub, someone who inflates condoms and turns them to balloons, more importantly, someone who would be so excited to see a street empty of cars that he'd end up lying on the ground and falling asleep.  I'm just saying...| Posted on 2011-05-20 00:00:00 | by ANGELO | [ Reply to This ] | The cynic says, I'll have no more | until another's at the door and then skeptic's narrowed eye props up the corpse for one more try You're much too comfortable with your vices. :) | Posted on 2011-05-19 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ] | i get this....oh these men are such "a-holes" | but i also see this as not so much gender bashing, but kind of a tongue-in-cheek way of saying..i have let myself be used and abused..it is my own fault that i have trusted these guys...not that all of them are bad..just that i drop into the wrong relationships... there is in your face directness here but also a camouflaged humor too-- and we all know that the full moon will shine again... i love the line "all those mates of 'soul'" perfect... yes i agree with dolor..a bit droll in spots..but that really feels intended and well placed... and i can't disagree with this..a lot of our gender are like this...yeah they are. jacob | Posted on 2011-05-19 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ] | Truly inspired writing. I have nothing in the way of criticism and I have nothing constructive to add. Sorry for leaving such a poor comment and thank you for the enjoyable read. | | Posted on 2011-05-19 00:00:00 | by nicodemous | [ Reply to This ] | I had a big grin on my face reading this. The way you wrote it was interesting; it's very detached and unaffected, almost as though you don't care. | You just slapped it on a piece of paper like a drunk in a bar who smashes his glass grunting to the bartender for another. It was brilliant. It seems like your bashing the other gender directly but really, I think your bashing more yourself indirectly. I don't know if it makes any sense or not but I thoroughly enjoyed it. Have a great day. Cheers, | Posted on 2011-05-19 00:00:00 | by charmedidentity | [ Reply to This ] | This piece was kind of off-putting but I think it's intentional, like a purposely emotionless piece. The speaker is just too tired to bring any more light to this topic because quite frankly, it's been exhausted enough. I really see that here, and I appreciate its style more than anything. It read very plainly like a chapter in a book that didn't really tell me too much information, didn't quite grip me, but I think therein lies the beauty in this pallor piece because again it defines the speaker's tone: neglectful, disconcerting, uncaring, ghostly. | I enjoyed this unique rendition of a lover's sorrow and heartache. | Posted on 2011-05-19 00:00:00 | by Dolor | [ Reply to This ] | Gosh girl , what a sorry lot of lousy two faced a$$holes we seem to be through these eyes . Tell me you haven't really had that bad a time with my kind . I like to think we're capable of spiritually fulfilling followthrough . That with some wantonly lustful sex on the side we're the companion made for your type . Lets party dance and sing let me give you some hope . We're not all denigrating and despicable drudges with self gratification on our minds and sadism in our hearts , or salaciously enticing provocateurs with words of sweet honey that have no roots in our souls . Although I admit I've played the plasticine porter before to get what I want , I like to think I left them with a sweet taste in their mouths and a fond memory that rings true . I don't feel like a rare breed . I wish you luck on your next moonlight escapade . | Bruce | Posted on 2011-05-19 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ] | |
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