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    dots Submission Name: Angel Downdots

    Author: Anneboleyn707
    ASL Info:    18/Female/Pennsylvania
    Elite Ratio:    3.96 - 44/84/67
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
    Total Views: 547
    Average Vote:    3.0000
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    dotsAngel Downdots

    Look aft, where brought the angel down.

    Far too close she fell,

    With muted sound.

    Much too far

    For troubled things,

    She journeyed down with broken wings;

    More desirous than the blooming spring

    That stretched out in the fields,

    And watched their mother earth grow old

    From strain and tired spirits still.

    Soft flowers failed in rains to bloom,

    And angel fallen

    Rose too soon;

    With blurry tension sensed the state,

    Where so much green had met its fate.

    Where in the winter she had mis-stepped,

    Fair mother earth

    Died from neglect.

    Submitted on 2011-05-21 07:35:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    I do like the poem even if I disagree with its subject's premises. It is never forced or campy despite the rhyme scheme. It kind of "flutters" down to the end as you read it and has a very whimsical quality to it. This is good writing and a well done piece. Though, I do feel the effort is wasted on a problem that either is not real, or is beyond control and scope of manů
    | Posted on 2011-05-23 00:00:00 | by nicodemous | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this. I like the visions it paints in my head. Angels being separated from Mother Earth...
    although, you may mean flowers are angels...

    I had a nightmare once about angels. I started referencing the bible for all things about angels, and developed quite a horror for them. From what I dreamed, and what the book said... I don't understand WTF people are doing when they reconstruct them to be fairy-ish and gentle. Angels are in no way gentle creatures... They are horrible and strike fear to the core of all encountering them.

    But I love this poem. It makes them seem beautiful again...
    | Posted on 2011-05-21 00:00:00 | by Runes | [ Reply to This ]

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