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    dots Submission Name: 'Lets get set!' by RPL the ripple effectdots
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    Author: orpheus
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 188/165/57
    Words: 204
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Romance
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    dots'Lets get set!' by RPL the ripple effectdots
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    She is the make-up and the heels
    mixed with fragrent perfume
    perfect view of her like she's famous
    the way she waltz in the room
    As every head turns to look
    she starts catching their eyes
    they start dropping their jaws
    to the floor that's when she smiles!
    that killer smile got me shaking
    like a b-boy break to the beat
    like a salt and pepper shaker
    when the only thing's at
    stake is the meat
    and the way you shake
    ya body baby makes me crazy u c
    I'm hungry for your honey
    lovey I've got the bottle to squeeze (ya)

    'you're the one and only
    there is no one more beautiful
    lift me up when I'm lowly
    the perfect fit so suitable
    you are the one and only
    no other girl in the world cool as you
    let this love live free
    so we live life outside this cubicle'
    you're the one the only
    The definition of beautiful
    lift me up when I'm lowly
    the perfect fit so suitable
    you are the one and only
    no other girl in the world cool as you
    let this love live free
    so we live life outside this cubicle x




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