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    dots Submission Name: Too Late Lauren dots
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    Author: nicodemous
    ASL Info:    7-5-82/M/Hell
    Elite Ratio:    5.58 - 283/221/121
    Words: 89
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsToo Late Lauren dots
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    The door is now closed
    And I'n sorry you didn’t make it through
    During that time I'd have done anything for you

    You cannot hold it against me
    Or her
    For it was only you who had to choose

    You didn't want me then
    And truly, you don't really now
    You're just mad you've lost your toy

    Loyal no longer
    Willing to stay in one place and wait
    patiently, to be fondled by enticement's promises

    That never were
    And never will





    Submitted on 2011-05-21 21:17:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      parts of this seem as straightforward as prose (which makes the effect a bit uneven at times, example - You're just mad you lost your toy).

    Sometimes the rearview is the best view.
    | Posted on 2011-05-22 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      "to be fondled by enticement's promises"

    quite a nice line, my friend.

    straight at ya poem...and very sad.
    at least for the one spoken to...the speaker seems to have moved on just fine.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-05-21 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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