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    Author: Runes
    Elite Ratio:    5.29 - 790/815/281
    Words: 137
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsMeowwwwdots
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    Little Kitty climbed a tree;
    little boy chased, skinned both knees
    inching out across the branch...
    limb snapped, boy fell, tore his pants.

    Fireman came, brought his ladder,
    climbed up high -- thought he had her.
    Little Kitty spat and hissed;
    Fireman grabbed air, tumbled, missed.

    Wind blew, Kitty climbed up higher;
    Onlookers' predictions dire.
    Kitty watched their endless schemes
    from her lofty perch of green.

    Several men of similar ilk
    set out trappings, bowls of milk.
    Kitty ate a bird instead,
    dropping feathers on their heads.

    "Fuck that cat!" each finally glowered,
    cursing Kitty's treetop tower.
    "Fall and die, bitch! Starve to death!"
    Kitty stretched, blinked, unimpressed.

    Darkness came and quite nimbly
    Kitty leaped down from the tree,
    shook her tail and hit the street...
    Every cat lands on her feet.




    Submitted on 2011-05-21 22:45:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Ohhh. Best.
    Not a single predictable rhyme to be found.
    So happy. Favorites.
    Love kitties. Embodies all that is feline.
    Yay. ~Syn
    | Posted on 2011-06-29 00:00:00 | by Syn | [ Reply to This ]
      Although I'm not big on rhyming pieces, this one really works for me. It's playful and whimsical, yet with serious undertones (hmmm..reminds me of another poem I read recently which failed to elicit the type of commentary it deserved...but i digress...). Anyway, you are a superb poet because i don't read this literally at all; rather, i see it, like jacob does, as a woman personified. A mediocre poet would write this as a literal piece; you have transcended that. Nicely done, runes...

    ~rubie
    | Posted on 2011-05-22 00:00:00 | by rubie | [ Reply to This ]
      perhaps the wisest in the crew
    should ask if kitty needs rescued...
    | Posted on 2011-05-22 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      I have to say this read quite smoothly and the rhyming was perfect in most ways, I enjoyed the fact that most of the rhyming was indirect or how shall I say, it was not just straight rhyming, more of a unique feel to it, anyways it's been ages since I wrote or read anything so this might not be the feedback it should be.. Was fun reading it still...
    | Posted on 2011-05-22 00:00:00 | by Clayman | [ Reply to This ]
      this could also be about a woman...i see that almost more than the cat...like this terrific personification

    you are quite creative..the poem is fun...takes a turn for the sarcastic, edgy feeling...

    and ends with the contentment of knowing she won..either the kitty or the woman...

    i'll come down when i feel like it...like a woman whom you cannot force to do anything..very independent...

    i had fun reading this.

    the rhyming stuff usually turns me off a bit..but this one i found engaging and natural.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-05-21 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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