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    dots Submission Name: Fight for Controldots

    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 116
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dots Fight for Controldots

    In terms of a child
    you are a fit

    a mess
    something that should be swept up and stored away
    could never trash you

    an echoe down the hall,
    won't someone put in a new song?

    we are in need of some melody here
    in this claustrophobic dark bedroom
    even when you let the light in it stains
    your eyes
    too bright
    too bright
    solid and liquid take flight
    nothing tangible here
    oh well there is always something tangible here
    it is just liqoured up and evaporated into the air
    the spaces between spaces
    try this
    focus on your breathing
    do this for a week and tell me what you get

    Submitted on 2011-05-23 14:00:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I feel like I just went to crazy and back. Very interesting write.

    A little melancoly, a little self destructive, escapism, feeling lost.

    Deep down you know what to do. Yes, that is hard.

    I liked reading it, nice write.
    | Posted on 2011-05-24 00:00:00 | by snacky fish | [ Reply to This ]
      I like. I like the last couple of lines a lot - reminds of something a very cool dude once said, ;) Not to be too intrusive but it sounds like you are describing a stale situation and/or relationship. Maybe.
    | Posted on 2011-05-23 00:00:00 | by Solomon Disease | [ Reply to This ]

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