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    dots Submission Name: Love's Conclusiondots
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    Author: stefhy
    ASL Info:    21/f/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 165/83/37
    Words: 212
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
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       Is this love left, that we're fighting for? Or are we afraid of anything different?


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    dotsLove's Conclusiondots
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    And now we're left here, Just taking turns.
    Cutting into wounds.
    The gashes left from our loving past,
    The love that came too soon.
    We feel our fight, still brewing within.
    But are we meant to stick together?
    Both our hearts and all of our blood, is weakening in this weather.
    You're just being stubborn, I'm just being tough.
    All that's left is 'attachment' and that's not enough.

    You slip my words back into your pocket, Not to hear them now.
    Save them for us locked in tomorrow, we'll pretend to forget somehow.
    And all those lies you hand out with a grin,
    I'll brand them with love, as you intended them in.
    Just smile and bare it, rub your palm to my cheek.
    Our warmth won't return to the promise we keep.
    The hatred so subtle in a beauty once strong.
    Together we stand here, when we know it's so wrong.

    Are our souls really one, or have we gave them away?
    Lost them in shadows of contempt that we lay.
    Are they really your fingers, intwined into mine?
    Or are you afraid to be alone all the time?

    My darling, I love you - or have loved you before.
    But the heartbeat I felt isn't mine anymore.




    Submitted on 2011-05-24 13:38:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      very nice steph. i believe there are many that can relate to this. i myself am guilty as charged. :P i think i talked to you about it actually.
    but yes, such times are the most awkward. you hit the nail right on the head. excellent work, steph. hope to talk to you again soon.
    -aaron
    | Posted on 2011-05-28 00:00:00 | by Thief | [ Reply to This ]
      terrific stuff this...

    i have been through this several times..staying together because???what...we are too afraid to be alone...too dependent on each other?

    we knew it was over but wouldn't admit or do something about it...

    that is really sad...being with someone because of fear of being alone...we need to be strong ourselves to be strong with someone else..and if it isn't working, both people need to be able to move on...
    otherwise it just gets more and more awkward and uncomfortable..

    this expresses that very well..

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-05-24 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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