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    dots Submission Name: || Goodbye.||dots

    Author: NeonCookies
    ASL Info:    20/Female/ US, Texas.
    Elite Ratio:    2.74 - 18/19/13
    Words: 237
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
    Total Views: 442
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       Just a poem from a heartbroken girl. Blah.

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    dots|| Goodbye.||dots

    Goodbye, but don't you forget me my dear. The words seem like a threatening bad debt.
    I'm hoping this is all to blame on incubus. Coping with the fact I can't hold onto you, is too much, I believe I finally cracked.
    Tears fall down from bronze eyes, cheers to agony and regret.
    She is my first regret, I knew from the day we met. This was a mistake, now Imust welcome the shakes and aches.

    Goodbye, you deserve better anyways.
    Goodbye, bearer of my shattered heart.
    Goodbye, get a kick start on your new life.

    Suddenly this pain, hits the vein. The strain, the days of empty bed sheets; seems to welcome me.
    Rain clouds come to play again, hiding my tears. Guiding my way to this emptyness.
    If I smile know it's fake, never believe.
    Soon i'll know, i'll awake from this dream. It seems all she did was try to fix me, but I wasn't broken.
    Please be a dream, Please let this be a dream.

    Goodbye my love, goodbye the once pleasant dove.
    Goodbye is all that's left to say.
    Goodbye you dirty heart thief, theft is the crime.

    Suddenly, I feel, I realize this is not a dream.
    This is my life.
    But it can't be my life, when she was my life.

    Submitted on 2011-05-24 14:48:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      awww..this one is heartbreaking. And I hope it's not autobiographical..because no one deserves such pain. I love this poem, because it was honest and seemed familiar..keep writing..poem is such a strong healing tool..
    | Posted on 2011-05-27 00:00:00 | by vedanta19 | [ Reply to This ]

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