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    dots Submission Name: Praise Through Tribulation A Note To Selfdots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
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    Meloncholy Spirit,

    embrace the arms of your gentle lover

    be gathered up in the sweet rain that washes away sin and deceitful thoughts

    be kissed by the sweet lips that would breathe through you if you could just open up

    Unfaithful Prisoner,

    Recall

    You are not bound but by the dreams and memories that steal your sleep at night

    You ARE free

    Petition for a new song, new song, new song

    Dance in the dawn of a new day

    Open your eyes to the Melody of your mourning




    Submitted on 2011-05-25 11:38:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this reminds me of the verse in Zechariah 9:12 Turn you to the strong hold, ye prisoners of hope: even to day do I declare [that] I will render double unto thee;...especially the part were you call yourself an unfaithful prisoner.

    we are like silver and gold that must pass through the refiner's fire in order to be rendered pure and that the Master's reflection may be seen in us.

    i like your refrain of allowing yourself to open up and let Christ live "breath" through you. this is key to the Christian life. Paul in Gal 2:20 say "the life which i now live, i live by the faith OF the Son of God..."many mis read this and say "faith BY the son of God". but this is not what the Apostle is saying. he is saying that he is dead with Christ and that Christ will live through him.

    lastly, i love how you personified Melody by capitalizing it. showing that Christ is the Melody in our mourning.

    overall, this is a nicely done piece.
    -john-paul
    | Posted on 2011-05-27 00:00:00 | by rev.jpfadeproof | [ Reply to This ]
      Beautiful. I loved the part ". . . kissed by the sweet lips that would breathe through you . . ." sounds like a very deep kiss - between two souls rather than just two pairs of lips. This made me feel like it had a message of acceptance - moving forward, positive. Loved it.
    | Posted on 2011-05-26 00:00:00 | by Solomon Disease | [ Reply to This ]


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