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    dots Submission Name: Bird Headdots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 129
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsBird Headdots
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    I am looking down at my arms, and growing out of my pores there are tiny, tiny

    tiny

    miniscule

    can barely see it

    feathers

    My stomache turns, fingertips gasp at the air
    hope triggers anticipation, soon could I be?
    Flying?

    Action, Active,
    Cooperating with time and space and the environment around me.

    Oh what a dream,
    what a beautiful transparent kinda got stuck in the back of my head in disbelief all this time
    Idea

    I am the vioce in my heart,
    that Holy Spirit,
    that greater he that is within me

    worlds and parallel worlds and reflections and super planes and angles all within the tiniest particles of right now

    Tiny feathers?
    They are for flying.




    Submitted on 2011-05-27 13:36:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      A very nice description of "realization" - the visuals are cool. It puts me right there - wherever or whatever you are talking about I'm seeing. Cool stuff. Enjoyed it.
    | Posted on 2011-05-28 00:00:00 | by Solomon Disease | [ Reply to This ]


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