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    dots Submission Name: Puzzle of The Wavesdots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 285
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsPuzzle of The Wavesdots

    Though you cannot explain
    How the stories of centuries
    Are coloured through your veins
    It’s still as if you speak, with a tongue
    That no one, not even you, understands

    Placed like a snowflake
    A floating feather beneath the weight
    Scurrying across, the puzzle of the waves
    A drop in a sea
    Of an ocean which has no name
    And what’s in a name anyway

    But still you cannot explain
    How your eyes see and what they perceive
    Through the windows of the sun
    A vocabulary
    Of its beauty
    Turns you through, all of you, inside out

    But placed on the stars
    Lay the fingertips of your heart
    The count of their beat
    Is your distance from the start
    Sprint with a shadow
    While your feet remain glued, to the spot

    Even though you cannot explain
    How you hear the pin prick of infinity
    As it echoes with the angels
    When they danced with you in a heaven
    You once called home

    But still alone in a forever
    Runs the melody of a song that you sung
    Through every twist and turn
    Flows the river, to the lake, only you could have become
    Tossed like a stone through the ripples
    Of every pebbles grave

    And always you ponder, the puzzle
    Written on the surfaces of waves

    How your soul sees and what your spirit perceives
    As you live and as you breathe
    Through the windows of the sun
    A vocabulary
    Of your beauty
    Turns you through you in all of you, inside out

    A drop in the sea
    Of an ocean which has no name
    And what’s in a name anyway

    Submitted on 2011-05-27 18:37:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really love this piece. I can't believe you haven't gotten any comments on this. I've read over it several times and every time I keep coming back to the same thought. It makes me think about the gift of poetry and where it comes from. How it is a mystery and a puzzle in itself.

    Love of Christ,

    | Posted on 2012-05-18 00:00:00 | by lynn7 | [ Reply to This ]

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