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    dots Submission Name: Our Circle in The Lightdots
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    Author: Esophagus1
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 231/279/149
    Words: 126
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsOur Circle in The Lightdots
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    The perfect circle of light
    is burned into their eyes
    as unending sight
    to watch everything die.

    Strangely, the invisible guest chuckles
    as we sleep in a box like a body.
    Head to head, force and buckle
    crushing their skull softly.
    Somewhere they're screaming.
    Someone is dreaming.

    In death I'm only hiding
    In life my time I'm only biding.
    To my stomach it's sliding.
    It slithers like death on the water
    rolling like an acid-fog frog's daughter
    praying not to be cannon-fodder.

    Spoon out the brain and replace
    with six million twitching spider legs.
    The puppet twists to a stone race.
    fuck the glass; we pump this keg of hate
    devouring our insides as we ingurgitate
    killing everything,
    starting with a clean slate.




    Submitted on 2011-05-30 15:51:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I'm digging your philosophy. Your not alone...
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