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    dots Submission Name: Grinddots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 227
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsGrinddots
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    A couple of petty feelings scraping at the pit of my stomache

    waking up in the morning to inhale the smoke of another hot tired frizzled tight tight tightly wound
    day

    stiff sharp pain underneath shoulderblades
    dread
    all consuming overwhelming, regret
    mistake

    can't control the traffic,
    the time
    a phone call you could have made

    I felt like it was important, felt like
    but then selfishly took the pity of one who has went all day without food or water or consideration

    what is it like to exist inside your sour stoned mind

    Do you love me?
    Of course
    Very much?
    Yes I do.
    I love you very much.
    A spot in the sky is larger than the whole world, this city this galaxy this place.
    Your point?
    It amazes me.
    And what made you think of that?
    It's just amazing.

    Oh you are stoned so you forgot, I don't want to be irritated by this honey but I am
    and I can't watch a movie with you tonight because we got home too late and I need a shower and what's your priority???

    Ah
    relax
    by the end of the day even if you don't hear what you want to hear it will be okay
    very good and good and okay

    I love you.




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      Sounds like a heart attack coming on or a need for a big dose of MAALOX. LOL
    We all have days where things go wrong, that could have been made better, just with a few kind words from a friend or loved one.
    | Posted on 2011-06-09 00:00:00 | by DUSTYTU | [ Reply to This ]
      Food for thought here....hmmm... could be read in so many different ways: as hopeful, but slightly confused, or sad and depressed, or full of longing and uncertain about the future of true love here... or half hopeful and half despairing.... or just fed up and scarcastic... as I say, food for thought... nice work!!!
    | Posted on 2011-06-02 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
      I've read it. But I think I need to read it a couple of more times. First thought - relationships. Confusion. Clarity. Thinking about being in love so badly that the character feels like she is in love. Yet the daily activities are a chore. It's like the relationship has fallen into the part in the character's mind where the daily chores are kept - something you just need to do for the sake of doing it and getting out of the way but not necessarily getting any sort of pleasure out of it. I don't think it's a reflection of you or your life. Just saying what I thought. Nice.
    | Posted on 2011-06-01 00:00:00 | by Solomon Disease | [ Reply to This ]


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