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    dots Submission Name: and about herdots

    Author: vedanta19
    Elite Ratio:    3.28 - 503/510/143
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsand about herdots

    The dominant sun smiles,
    almost immediately -
    when she walks in;

    The shadows of weary nights
    that had answered,
    her sombre twilights;

    self weaves yet another web

    An immaculate eyes
    ponder mysterious yests,
    exclamating todays;

    she seems to have all the luck,
    unshed tears
    cleverly hidden away;

    quietness of rain-drenched morns;

    Wonderment of her infectious laughs,
    one and many;

    like an actor of many characters,
    each brilliant,
    each classic,
    each inviting applause;

    a yearning you questions -
    how about her?

    a breezy wind on an ivory-coast,
    in bondage of rainbow afar,
    anticipating freedom;

    this is about her.
    this is her.

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