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    dots Submission Name: Dilemmadots

    Author: vedanta19
    Elite Ratio:    3.28 - 503/510/143
    Words: 209
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Hurting sharp words,
    break heart of self,
    pondering -

    is it self in denial
    love through rose-tinted glasses;

    loving doesn't come too easy,
    heart-breaking nothing new,
    moaning secretly
    do come easy;

    hidden tales of insecurity
    flow deeply;

    past scars easy to forget,
    still healing
    such sensitivity is too suicidal -
    clever say;

    wonder if you regard
    any same -
    let bygones remain bygones?

    starting over so easy?
    you speak - i listen,
    it has been ever the same;

    now -
    love rediscovered ;

    the old question - still remains;

    a moody moon looks on,
    can this be forever?

    you speak - i listen,
    it has been ever the same;

    can fate reverse that;

    make you not
    but a decision-maker?

    make you not
    so strong for love of yourself
    feebly weak with love for me?

    is it possible;

    when we begin -
    we were so weak of love
    for eachother;

    just us - rest
    so frivolous
    so mundane
    such an avoidable luxury;

    hope you reverse;

    promises, love and tenderness;

    in the end - matters do lose by soul.

    Submitted on 2011-06-01 16:43:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      some awkwarness because of the wording...odd structure..not sure if it is intended...but actually in some respects it works...makes us pay closer attention to each line....are we weak as a couple or weak kneed with love for each other...
    is this a plea to get the "us" back?

    a soul weakend by love or without..

    interesting write...even in the awkwardness, no waste of words here..

    | Posted on 2011-07-17 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

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