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    dots Submission Name: Summer Walkdots

    Author: Solomon Disease
    ASL Info:    101, male, earth
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 284/292/104
    Words: 228
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsSummer Walkdots

    Walking through downtown
    It's a hot day
    The women have barely any clothing on
    Admiring, thinking, lusting

    Then suddenly our eyes lock
    Her mouth almost twitches to give away a smile
    But she doesn't want to give herself away
    The pattern on her low cut top accents her curves
    It's hypnotizing

    Walking towards each other
    Drawn to each other
    Think of something to say

    The conversation seems natural
    Her eyes are like the ocean on a perfect day
    You want to go swimming in them

    You can feel it
    You can tell she feels it too

    That warm feeling growing inside
    You feel a beam of light connecting you to her
    The more you talk the more you know
    You've met before
    In a dream
    In another life

    Time seems meaningless
    Maybe it's been hours
    Maybe minutes
    Maybe seconds
    Or maybe days

    She tells you things
    You tell her things
    You feel safe
    She feels safe
    Like home

    Time to go a voice says
    You hug
    She smells great
    Your hand moves slowly from her upper back
    To her lower back
    She moves in closer

    You let her go
    You look into each other one more time
    And you know
    She knows

    You exchange numbers
    Say goodbye
    Meeting tomorrow
    For tea

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    ||| Comments |||
      I love seeing this type of thing from the guy's perspective :) I think the female version of this would be a funny write along side!

    | Posted on 2011-06-08 00:00:00 | by Joybell | [ Reply to This ]
      :0 my oh my, encounter this.

    I think it is unique how nonchalantly the structure of this piece reveals the events occuring, but still manages to be very deep and powerful with what is being described.

    | Posted on 2011-06-02 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]

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