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    dots Submission Name: A minimalist poem in C-minordots
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    Author: Hazy skies
    ASL Info:    18/M/Texas
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 20/51/25
    Words: 34
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsA minimalist poem in C-minordots
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    Give me silence
    Safe in the solitude of music
    The beauty of being alone
    Insurmountably, it sits at my fore-front
    Forever lending me my sanity
    If only for such fleeting moments
    As these are...




    Submitted on 2011-06-05 00:04:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is not a minimalist poem. There are too many words. I expected something more like a haiku...
    | Posted on 2011-07-02 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      Music can be the only voice for those with an empty life, or just a sweet filler for the time when one is down.
    Very good, thanks.
    | Posted on 2011-06-08 00:00:00 | by DUSTYTU | [ Reply to This ]
      i get "it"

    so the "it" could be the music, could be the silence...open ended...

    cool then...


    and we are all poets...no ranking...we all are works in progress!

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    | Posted on 2011-06-05 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      interesting contrast of silence in music...give me silence so i can hear my music...or let me just dance to the beat of my own drum...

    i like short...

    tight like this is..

    my problem is the forth line "it"

    too ambiguous in reference...would like to see a noun there anyway..add more color to the line...i like the ending..very much.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-06-05 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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