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    dots Submission Name: twice is nicedots
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    Author: Joybell
    ASL Info:    22/F/MO
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 101/94/56
    Words: 228
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotstwice is nicedots
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    I shouldnt do this, I know.
    I shouldnt talk to you anymore, I should just ignore the feelings that I am letting come knocking at my hearts door.

    Its not like we havent been here,
    What are we doing, what will we be? If anything?
    She is pretty and tall and skinny and smart and talented and dark. She lives in Florida too. Who knew? Stay with her, better off if you do.

    This is just me, sure I have a piece of your heart and your innocence and virginity, but this is just me, we were just babies.
    That prolly just means something to me.
    I am everything you want, but not what you want your friends to think that you want. Did you get that? I'm stumped!

    I should steer clear, not even get near.
    I don't want to be the one who is on the recieving end of having to hear - we are just friends-

    Shouldnt even let this begin, so why this silly grin? Yet I remember, whoever cares the least is in control of the relationship, ...did I just say relationship? Yes, I guess that was a -slip-
    I'm not who you remember from those past septembers, I won't let my heart bleed this time. You will not be my newest crime.








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      Ha! I've been there, though on the other side. :)Sometimes things get awkward. The most important thing is to remember to have fun.

    Good writing!
    | Posted on 2011-07-03 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      Not sure why you chose to go the rhyming route. Doesn't really take away from it . . . couple of parts are iffy, feels forced instead of natural . . . maybe you wanted it to feel that way. It was enjoyable. A look at growing as a person and in the process growing out of a relationship. Good stuff.
    | Posted on 2011-06-06 00:00:00 | by Solomon Disease | [ Reply to This ]


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