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    dots Submission Name: Age of Irondots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 290
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsAge of Irondots
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    Should the human tale
    Become nothing more than a tear
    Sorrow written quiet
    In the dumb mouths of history

    Grey within the sunlight
    Dark inside the love
    All proof to the conscience
    We forgot

    Where are we now in this grand future
    When any child any where, dies of hunger
    When medication controls the young
    And sends it’s tendrils of disaffection into everyone

    Should the human story, be written so
    In entertainments celluloid war
    Portrayed by the gangsters and bankster of bullet and blood
    And marched upon the killing fields of propaganda

    Is this us
    Is this what we have become

    To be governed and guided by the faceless
    Bloated egos of wealth and greed
    To be made ever less
    And forced to live under their duress

    Cowering now beneath our willing blindness
    While the nameless skin tight skeletons
    Beg us
    For the mountains of food we store in supermarkets

    We weep in the anguish of our souls, in silence
    The truth carved among us
    While we dedicate the boredom of our discontent
    To the next phase of pressing entertainment

    Should the human tale
    Become nothing more than a tear
    Sorrow written quiet
    In the dumb mouths of history

    We have become the weapons
    And the finger trigger pull on them
    For nothing more than mindless acquisition
    To live in regret, this age of iron

    To pass each day and each life
    Burying the truth in an evidence of sand
    We who lived
    We who survived

    Did so by the death, of our brother and sisters
    Of some far off and foreign land
    And out of sight
    Became out of mind




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