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    dots Submission Name: Franklin Bently Darrendots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 138
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsFranklin Bently Darrendots
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    There is a cottage by the sea
    where a young man lives alone

    The height of his morning
    accomponied by a solitary yawn
    breaking into,
    a sip
    of coffee
    made the night before by the late Mrs. Keurig
    what a honey

    and he will take a walk today
    savoring the sounds of the sea
    sharing his delight with no one
    and feeling no need

    his spirit is full
    cup never half empty
    he has found reason in his blessings

    a good sign to believe

    Peaceful waves chop at the pebbles on the beach
    he snaps a picture
    for his own enjoyment
    and no one else

    Content
    never saw anyone so content
    Blessed
    never saw someone sleep so well

    retired
    handsome
    Incredibly Incredibly blessed
    The captain of his most wonderful ship




    Submitted on 2011-06-06 12:08:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      When peace is truly found, little else is needed.
    very goo, thanks !
    | Posted on 2011-06-07 00:00:00 | by DUSTYTU | [ Reply to This ]
      I realy liked readling this. It actualy made me feel peaceful with the imagery.

    Yet I am confused how a young man can happily live alone and a dead woman can make coffee for said young man.

    Not that details like that are important to art or poetry. The confusion I felt made me think that the young man killed his wife the night before, thus feeling very blessed and happy to be rid of her.... lolz... I dont know.

    Very nice write!
    | Posted on 2011-06-06 00:00:00 | by snacky fish | [ Reply to This ]
      Buddha? I love how peaceful this made me feel. I've heard good things about Keurig brewers - haven't tried it though. Good things about their K-Cups too. This is a great picture of someone fully content - enlightenment, happiness, peace, the only sad thing is no love :( You should've talked about him and his lover together or something :P. But I guess the late Mrs. Keurig could be his love - making coffee for him from beyond death. A sign of the love they shared. Very enjoyable.
    | Posted on 2011-06-06 00:00:00 | by Solomon Disease | [ Reply to This ]


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