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    dots Submission Name: In Death Never Apartdots
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    Author: Realitywarp87
    ASL Info:    25/M/FL
    Elite Ratio:    3.1 - 27/53/63
    Words: 182
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 956
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    Bytes: 1106



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       Romeo + Juliet


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    dotsIn Death Never Apartdots
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    You had me at the moment
    I laid my eyes on yours
    Knowing instantly that our love
    Would prove to be a war
    For without you I had known
    That I could never be
    Because the minute that you leave my side
    My heart screams in agony
    You told me that you love me
    And in turn I said the same
    Until our hearts stop beating
    Together we will remain
    Who knew those precious moments
    Would quickly meet their fate
    As others tried to tear apart
    What only death could separate
    Now I hold you in my arms
    We begin to calm our fears
    Knowing this is the only way
    That our love can last for years
    We bow our heads in silence
    Then I begin to pray
    For our love to be eternal
    And in our hearts always remain
    Now you kiss me with your steel
    As I pierce you with my soul
    The warmth within our bodies
    Externally now flows
    In life we were together
    In death never apart
    In arms we lie forever
    With blood shed in our hearts




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