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    dots Submission Name: Di Sectiondots

    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 165
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsDi Sectiondots

    please someone erase this,
    or give me some warmth to get me through

    my days are kind and through them I have found security
    in love

    yet I sit here
    as the morning yawns and turns her head to dream in her own night

    the day wakes

    gives such a cross feeling
    what do I have to be so lonely about

    It must be self deception
    childish attention seeking
    and egotistical tantrum
    boiling to the surface

    can I ask you Father God?
    What do I do about this?

    Should I sing a song
    dwell on lovlier things
    will the lie and deception in my own heart
    break the power of that truth?

    the difference between what I know and what I feel
    and how to break the barriers of my heart
    of my soul

    just a girl sitting down
    not getting her way

    or knowing what her way is

    Submitted on 2011-06-09 10:44:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I can, in ways, relate to this piece and in ways I can see where Love, Peace, Joy, Abundance, Beauty & Prosperous Healthy Smiles to Share ;-) ;-) ;-) pulled me through the Black Hole Abyss and showed me the FLIP side of IT ~*~
    | Posted on 2011-06-10 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      Cool piece. I like how it kind of went back and forth between a place of feeling lost and finding yourself - in the first four sections. I liked how you presented the doubts in the next four - almost in a way as if the character is not sure wether they are actually her doubts. Then you make it clear on what path needs to be taken - by balancing what you know and feel and listening to your heart and soul :)

    Then there is confusion again at the end - maybe cause the realization seems too much to handle because it is so simple. It was cool dude.
    | Posted on 2011-06-10 00:00:00 | by Solomon Disease | [ Reply to This ]
      RIGHT, when you find your way, be sure to tell your friends, many are just as lost in this life and can use a little map reading course for their travels.
    this was a true observation at life, we were not born with a road map or a book of instructions.
    cute write
    | Posted on 2011-06-09 00:00:00 | by DUSTYTU | [ Reply to This ]

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