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    dots Submission Name: Inconclusivedots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 74
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsInconclusivedots
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    One mysterious bite had appeared on the surface,
    bruising the edges of that consummed piece of skin

    I held the entire thing in my hand
    observing
    the brown inside the bite

    Thinking
    about that single bite
    and what it meant for me

    the room we were in was empty
    as if the entire world were bare

    And if I had been hungry this would have been so easy




    Submitted on 2011-06-10 10:06:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      almost think of a recluse here....and the bite...bitten by love, consumed by it...or poisoned by it....

    if had been hungry, i would have given in...

    but like emily dickinson...i will remain autonomous...

    this really caught my eye...i like abstract...less said but more meanings implied...

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-07-15 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      This kind of made me hungry :)
    | Posted on 2011-06-11 00:00:00 | by Solomon Disease | [ Reply to This ]
      Happy day Lori!

    So happy you are still postINg!

    This had an Edgar Allen Poe, hollowness to IT and I LOVE minimalism!

    Have a great day and weekend with lots of Smiles to Share ;-) ;-) ;-)
    | Posted on 2011-06-10 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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