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    dots Submission Name: A *girls* summer walk dots

    Author: Joybell
    ASL Info:    22/F/MO
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 101/94/56
    Words: 326
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       This is in response to
    Solomon Disease - Summer walk
    It's a Tongue in cheek sloppy write :)

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    dotsA *girls* summer walk dots

    Walking downtown with friends
    its a hot day
    we are all trying to strut our stuff and keep dry
    Watching the boys, watching us, trying to hide their lust, loving the rush.

    Suddenly, I see him, wait, is he looking back at me!?
    Dont giggle
    I take a breath and stick out my chest and hold my head higher as we walk closer to each other
    I want to look away and cant, his eyes seem to be laughing at me , is he saying hi!?

    Exchange a pleasant greeting, his eyes are eating me.
    I remind myself to breath; I think I motioned for my girlfriends to leave

    I know he must see how his nearness is affecting me,
    Wishing I could pull out my heart to stop the pounding that I’m sure is giving me away

    Is it getting even warmer out here?
    We keep talking and I try to make full sentences, he smiles and I think I stop breathing.
    Trying not to look at his arms glistening in the sun; did he just catch me?! Now I want to run…

    Where are my friends? They have all walked on.
    How long have we stood here?
    Maybe days?

    He asks such good questions, and listens to the answer.
    I find I actually want to hear what he has to say about…well everything.
    Not to be pathetic, but I’m imagining him holding me- snap back to present

    He moves in to say goodbye, I hope I smell ok!
    Did he just brush my lower back? I feel the shivers down my legs
    Wishes he wouldn’t pull away.

    We exchange numbers, meeting tomorrow for tea
    Wait until he turns the corner and I have wings on my feet as I run to tell my girlfriends in a rush, the magic of his touch…tomorrow get here soon!

    Submitted on 2011-06-10 16:50:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very cool! Nicely done! I love the energy in yours. I like how at first you're trying to seduce the guy with your looks - "I take a breath and stick out my chest and hold my head higher" and then you just let it happen. It goes from trying to control to completely letting go of control - which shows control, hehe. Very enjoyable :)
    | Posted on 2011-06-11 00:00:00 | by Solomon Disease | [ Reply to This ]
      lol! How us guys love to watch you lovely ladies! You have such beautifully rounded parts, graceful movements, and things that make us guys go ga, ga....

    sugar and spice and everything nice...

    here's to nice..!

    Thanks for sharing this!
    | Posted on 2011-06-10 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]

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