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    dots Submission Name: Oxygendots
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    Author: snacky fish
    ASL Info:    31/male/FL
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 377/472/111
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 416
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    Description:
       Who doesn't uberly <3 thee, Oh oxygen?


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    dotsOxygendots
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    You are oxygen

    You most needed
    Needing nothing more
    Not the sun
    Not the stars
    Only what's in store

    You are oxygen

    The last breath
    My newest death
    Not the over
    Not the done
    Like life itself

    You are oxygen

    With out you I die
    In death with out you
    Not life support
    Not undead
    Every breath for you

    You are oxygen

    Effortlessly giving life
    Like life is effortless
    Not maybe
    Not impossible
    My coexist mistress

    You are oxygen




    Submitted on 2011-06-12 22:41:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this it is different. It's a good comparison.

    Can't help but breath oxygen, and it keeps us alive. Try and stop breathing you can't.
    | Posted on 2015-04-28 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      BreathINg Smiles to Share ;-)

    THE BREATH ~*~
    | Posted on 2011-06-13 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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