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    dots Submission Name: BLack rose blunderdots
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    Author: DocTaylor88
    Elite Ratio:    1.02 - 6/3/10
    Words: 214
    Class/Type: Misc/Depressed
    Total Views: 580
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1243



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    dotsBLack rose blunderdots
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    To the quick at night,
    the bright for bright.
    As light it fights,
    between the night.
    There is a rose so blunder,
    It makes a thunder,
    Transpiring the night,
    To quickened lights,
    That find a shame,
    That arose a collar,
    That bent the break,
    That winged a scholar
    To a sound so right,
    It fools the night.
    From a rose so blunder,
    it makes you ponder.
    The game is this,
    and in this whole order.
    From beginning to end,
    to end all over.
    Is a chain of twins,
    And its own daughters.
    Is the light that breaks,
    Between its fathers.
    To the out of mind,
    that mind and bother.
    The fruitfully lost,
    and quickened fathers.
    Goes a woman astray,
    who knows no daughters.
    As she sits and stands,
    And thinks of bothers.
    Her minds erray,
    She knows no others.
    So she bickers and bands,
    between the altar.
    Of her broken hands,
    and spoken falters.
    Her distance is well,
    she means to cauter.
    But her rose is black,
    shes but a blunder




    Submitted on 2011-06-13 02:06:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I still feel like I need to add more... I might it needs it!
    | Posted on 2011-06-22 00:00:00 | by DocTaylor88 | [ Reply to This ]
      Thank you man! You don't know how that makes me feel. I put a lot into that poem. I really did, DAYS!!! And a lot of vocabulary enlightenment. Thank You!!!!Sincerely.
    | Posted on 2011-06-22 00:00:00 | by DocTaylor88 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. That piece has so much to it. It's easy to get lost in its smooth rhythm. It's interesting how it jumps from point to point and cleverly intertwined to bring about the ending. I thoroughly enjoyed reading this
    | Posted on 2011-06-21 00:00:00 | by Indaleco | [ Reply to This ]


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