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    dots Submission Name: Mr. Brittle Bones isdots
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    Author: snacky fish
    ASL Info:    31/male/FL
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 377/472/111
    Words: 73
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 378
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    Bytes: 529



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    dotsMr. Brittle Bones isdots
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    Mr. Brittle Bones is creepy
    Like an artist's stare
    Size fitting a noose
    Standing on a chair

    Mr. Brittle Bones is moody
    Like an artist's muse
    One minute filled with glee
    The next bent to bruise

    Mr. Brittle Bones is sad
    Like an artist alone
    Every heart beat crushing
    His every brittle bone

    Mr. Brittle Bones is longing
    Like an artist's heart
    Skeleton hand reaching out
    Only to fall apart




    Submitted on 2011-06-13 22:21:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like how well you painted a picture inside my mind with your words. Black and white. Beautiful.
    I love this piece.

    Keep up the good work and I'll keep reading.

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    | Posted on 2011-06-16 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow ~ This was a strongly visual piece and I thought this piece reminded me of a puppet but within.

    Great work!
    Smiles to Share ;-)
    | Posted on 2011-06-14 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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