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    Author: sandman
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 1644/1440/613
    Words: 202
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    My place in time
    As I lay you down in my harmony

    Who would ever imagine
    This place in time
    I have found

    In riddle or rhyme
    Nurseries darkness awaits you love
    Kiss me your secrets
    And forever you will find
    Your place in time

    Dragons dance
    In the fires they breathe
    A pile of ashes
    Along the shore the leave

    Lust for the fire
    Burn forever in the dragon’s lair

    Still water runs deep
    Silent shores caress the beauty
    Of the passage that opens
    To the deep pines of the forest
    To where the river opens wide

    Running wild trickling free
    The waterfall consumes all of me
    Exception as my soul
    Runs with the river to the stream of my destiny

    In the darkness of the rivers depth
    I lay my head praying someone
    Will find me

    Guarding my sins
    I walk to these shores
    Through God’s hallway to deaths door

    A Chaplin at the Beggars funeral
    I retrieve you from my casket
    Lost are the days
    I’ve counted too many
    Forgiveness to you, the one
    Who condemned me
    To forever rest in the chains
    That bind our soul




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      Very very vivid, sinful, deadly, consuming, raw.

    This felt forbidden.
    Felt robbed of self control.
    Guided by sensuality.

    Very interesting write.

    Enjoyed this a lot.
    | Posted on 2011-06-15 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]


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