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Author: sandman
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Words: 202
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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My place in time
As I lay you down in my harmony

Who would ever imagine
This place in time
I have found

In riddle or rhyme
Nurseries darkness awaits you love
Kiss me your secrets
And forever you will find
Your place in time

Dragons dance
In the fires they breathe
A pile of ashes
Along the shore the leave

Lust for the fire
Burn forever in the dragon’s lair

Still water runs deep
Silent shores caress the beauty
Of the passage that opens
To the deep pines of the forest
To where the river opens wide

Running wild trickling free
The waterfall consumes all of me
Exception as my soul
Runs with the river to the stream of my destiny

In the darkness of the rivers depth
I lay my head praying someone
Will find me

Guarding my sins
I walk to these shores
Through God’s hallway to deaths door

A Chaplin at the Beggars funeral
I retrieve you from my casket
Lost are the days
I’ve counted too many
Forgiveness to you, the one
Who condemned me
To forever rest in the chains
That bind our soul




Submitted on 2011-06-14 15:11:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Very very vivid, sinful, deadly, consuming, raw.

This felt forbidden.
Felt robbed of self control.
Guided by sensuality.

Very interesting write.

Enjoyed this a lot.
| Posted on 2011-06-15 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]


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