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    dots Submission Name: Hang Glidingdots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsHang Glidingdots
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    Had been travelling through a thick wilderness,
    with unseen soldiers and mothers and children
    and fathers
    all around me
    Queens and Kings half steps behind me
    their shadows sometimes guiding my trail

    All unknown to me
    I chose to believe
    not only was I alone
    but lost

    Now I see as I climb steeper
    walk farther
    Press on

    That this place is higher than any Platuea
    and my head spins to compensate

    Yet once my vision clears
    I close my eyes
    and hold my breath back
    until I am sighing
    in pleasure
    in releif

    Grabbing hold of the only thing that is in from of me
    taking off
    to the valleys underneath my feet




    Submitted on 2011-06-15 09:23:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Beautiful, you found you were not alone in the wild, it just seemed that way at first.
    | Posted on 2011-06-15 00:00:00 | by DUSTYTU | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice and I liked where this went and how you took us there!

    Have a great day with Love, Peace, Joy, Abundance, Beauty & Prosperous Healthy Smiles to Share ;-) ;-) ;-)
    | Posted on 2011-06-15 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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