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    dots Submission Name: Round Likedots

    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 132
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dots Round Likedots

    Time turned the water black
    all light
    sucked from the sky

    A wind carried passengers across a tough stony field

    There are times in this where and when
    that the stillness screams with a stench so foul
    one cannot hardly breath

    And the winter
    is sick and humid

    The old grandfather withstood the pleasant springs and summers to get this way

    Cheer will come again
    Another trip around the clock if you can fast forward your mind
    and wrap your perspective on something more wonderful than a sun diseased predator
    searching for
    sun diseased prey

    with all things the observer only has to wait

    for another line
    another page
    another day
    or world where these things cease to be
    or Begin

    Submitted on 2011-06-15 10:40:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      hey and hi i remember exchanging comments with you along time ago
    thanx for the comments i am glad you liked

    i see that you stil write good stuf i enjoyed this post its funy the turns in life we take and the thoughts we write about
    thanx sandman
    | Posted on 2011-06-15 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      Very good, just wait, for even the foulest day will pass and once again the sun will peek through, spreading it's light upon the land, bringing forth the blooms and bees.
    Even the beautiful rose has its thorns.
    | Posted on 2011-06-15 00:00:00 | by DUSTYTU | [ Reply to This ]

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