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    dots Submission Name: Passionate Love Songdots
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    Author: sandman
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 1644/1440/613
    Words: 252
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsPassionate Love Songdots
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    Sing a song to yourself
    about freedom and passion
    let know one know the rhythm
    of your thoughts

    If I seem out of tune
    don’t be distant or confused
    we will find our harmony
    so say we will!
    Once again

    Don’t try to understand me,
    cast me aside just as you will
    Let’s see if we can hum
    our melody once again.

    Into a wildfire I have awaken
    the mist around me
    is engulfed with flames,
    oh lord what have
    I done to awaken this curse.

    To me in my mind , it comes natural to rectify
    the powers of my being
    once pushed aside
    the one standing behind , me
    always craves for affection!


    In all of love’s darkness,
    please let there be some light!
    Carry me across the wind driven plain
    so I can smell the richness of life and love and its pleasures

    Sing me a song
    about freedom and passion;
    let’s see if we can find our melody
    once again!

    Sing your song to yourself
    about the changes you have seen
    and made in yourself!

    Let no one know
    the rhythm of your thoughts
    If we seem out of tune,
    Dont be distant or confused

    Sing Me our song
    as it was once ago
    feel our passion there was no pain

    sing me a song
    about freedom or passion
    i will do my best to sing alone




    Submitted on 2011-06-15 14:59:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I really like this. Though it could be more melodic. The flow kinda stumbles in some parts. Other than that it's good as it is...
    | Posted on 2011-07-03 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      You've been busy writing! That's wonderful it seems you've found some inspiration. I've always admired your writing,
    it's a bit detached from reality(like me). You have the power in your writing, to take your reader to different places. Some are often open and free, while others are dark and empty. This poem gives us a feel of desperation for love and for freedom, longing for a song to lead your way.
    Love it.

    Christie

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    | Posted on 2011-06-16 00:00:00 | by lynn7 | [ Reply to This ]


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