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    dots Submission Name: un-given a namedots
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    Author: snacky fish
    ASL Info:    31/male/FL
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 377/472/111
    Words: 21
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       I'll show you mine if you show me yours.. meh this was kinda hard.


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    dotsun-given a namedots
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    Caring yet cold
    Offered yet opposed
    Empathic yet errant
    Xenophilic yet xenophobic
    Inescapable yet invisible
    Sensual yet secluded
    Trysting yet tangled




    Submitted on 2011-06-17 01:58:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I got to agree with DUSTYTU. Too cryptic for me to put the dots together.
    | Posted on 2011-06-18 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it, it made me think cause I hate mis-interpreting. I'm not sure if you were trying to convey a certain meaning, but instead trying to show this type of person who has these traits. These of course not exactly being contradicting traits, but close. Yet this person may act kind in the eyes of their friends, but deep down is a bigot, is shallow, apathetic....
    I really enjoy the word choice aswell, but I must ask, what does "trysting" mean?
    | Posted on 2011-06-17 00:00:00 | by OneDarkFlame92 | [ Reply to This ]
      Must be too early and my old brain is fuzzed, cuz this did not register. sorry
    | Posted on 2011-06-17 00:00:00 | by DUSTYTU | [ Reply to This ]


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