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    dots Submission Name: My Mask..dots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 279
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Venting
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       I no longer live with the mask I mastered I don't fake my feelings.. i no longer have the strength I once did.


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    dotsMy Mask..dots
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    The mask I created so long ago
    Had somehow became a part of me
    I kept this mask close to me
    Never revealing who I truly am
    I could never open the gates of the hell I have lived threw
    I hardly made it
    How could I expect someone to want to hear about it?
    So I go on living this life
    Day in - Day out
    This mask and I grew closer

    Finally I rose from the depths of hell
    To this place everyone around me calls Earth
    I am unsure which is worse!?
    Hell, where the devil lives?
    Or Earth, where many of his servants take on forms of life!

    This mask is becoming frail and worn from many uses
    Soon left to face the unknown possibilities of life on my own
    I am sadden from the home I have grown accustomed to is no longer there

    Granted it was my hell
    But it was A home!
    Yes, you were MY tormentor
    Yet, you were also MY savior!
    A broken beaten soul you have left me!
    Always wanting to leave begging to be whisked away
    Now that I am
    I am only full of doubt
    Just as you hoped I would be!

    Mom... I trusted you! I at some point in my life actually loved you! ... Why did you let him abuse me... Why don't you love me.. Mom?

    Why don't you like me?




    Submitted on 2011-06-17 02:37:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Nothing obscure about this. This write if full of transparency.

    This comes across as WAY to personal.

    If that is what you where aiming at, good job.

    In life you must find your self and transform into what who you are ment to be or dumb down and conform. I will tell you that the latter is much much easier and with out sadness.

    I was abused ALOT as a child, not sexualy though. You will never fully heal from it, and given a chance it will define you as an adult. The real test is transending the trauma and becoming some thing that normal humans cannot understand.

    I wish you luck, hard life is hard.
    | Posted on 2011-06-21 00:00:00 | by snacky fish | [ Reply to This ]


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