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    dots Submission Name: One More Songbird (Completed)dots
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    Author: AsiaticFox
    ASL Info:    28/M/A butterfly's dream
    Elite Ratio:    4.8 - 254/389/301
    Words: 780
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1273
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 5278



    Description:
       Yesterday I was putting the finishing touches on another poetry book. This one is rather small, only 60 pages (compared to the 113 and 130 pages of the previous two), but I wanted to do it now rather than wait until later for more material.

    While working on it, I read my One More Songbird trilogy, and I felt like writing another piece to complete it. Over two years have passed since I wrote the first three, so the fourth one sticks out, written in a different style, but I like it. The fourth part is highly personal, and it says a lot about what I wish and what I desire. Please take that into account when you comment. Thank you.

    Here, I present to you all four parts of the complete One More Songbird poem.

    The first three parts are published in 'Interstellar Love', 2009. The fourth part, 'On Into Infinity', is now published in 'Psalms of a Phoenix', 2011. Corey King


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    One More Songbird Can Change The World - May 28, 2009

    It was a misty morning when she came to me,
    her bright red feathers ablaze for all to see.
    I did not think my heart could bend in such a way,
    but it did, and now I feel compelled to say:


    One more songbird can change the world.
    One more heartfelt refrain to take away the pain.
    Come, now, and praise this heaven's child,
    for she saw fit to open our eyes to peace.

    And I feel ashamed for all my dark thoughts,
    for they are selfish and mundane.
    I feel enlightened when I hear her sing,
    for she sings the Sky's love eternal.

    One more songbird can change our hearts.
    One more day to live, and to learn.
    Come, now, and let your eyes fill with tears,
    for joy is overflowing like the Nile in the East.

    It was a summer evening when she went,
    and we the people stood with hearts content.
    Her bright red feathers fading in the night,
    and one last song she sang to keep us bright.



    One More Songbird - II: Phoenix, The Truthsayer - May 29, 2009

    That arrow is sharp, but beautiful.
    It kisses the depths of my soul,
    and poisons my blood with knowing.

    The inscription reads:
    'Speak of every secret,
    let it be the lampstand,
    and never give up the fire.'


    I am sunshine.
    I am brilliance.
    I am pierced through-and-through like the Phoenix.
    She sings only what she knows, and she sings truth.

    I wish to feel the world's sorrow,
    and maybe sing a song or two.
    I know that the Phoenix will assist me
    and guide them to Upper Xanadu.


    One More Songbird - III: Upper Xanadu - May 29, 2009

    How long has it been?
    I do not know, for my heart
    does not keep measure of time.
    All it knows is that it must work, and work hard,
    for there are many yet to be free.


    Upper Xanadu, streets of crystal gold.
    All the sighing people suddenly silenced,
    maybe overwhelmed by the lack of violence and fear.

    "Do not worry, for I am listening.
    I hear you dreaming.
    Moon beams have been your only friend, I know.
    But now it's time for all of that to change.
    I am here to show you how to breathe the sky.

    Phoenix, lovely teacher,
    you can speak better than I for sure."

    I never lose my sense of wonder
    as the Phoenix gains control.
    Swaying with the mass and only
    knowing nothing but every human need.

    Phoenix leads the song as she praises Him.
    I cannot believe how all-encompassing His love is.

    Twenty billion arrows ready and aimed,
    full of sharpened Love.
    Dancing like King David,
    I lead them into the streets.

    Fire!


    One More Songbird - IV: On Into Infinity - June 16, 2011

    When I awoke, there was such a feeling of joy
    that had never before been felt in the hearts of men.

    Each man and woman, pierced through with arrows of Love,
    and Thyamra, the Great Phoenix, shining brightly like the sun.

    ''See, Skyah has seen fit to give you infinite life!
    His love begets life, you see,
    and He pours it forth like a roaring waterfall.
    It will never dam up, no,
    nor will it ever become a mere trickle.''

    All the people gather round Thyamra,
    seeking a feathery embrace.
    Somehow, she manages to cover us all
    with her wings.

    ''Know that Skyah has always loved you,
    littles ones. My wings are His wings,
    and they will embrace you forever.''

    I am brought to my knees with emotion,
    and she nuzzles me gently with her beak.

    ''Ashke, you have done well, my son.
    Here, now, let me transform you.
    Flesh to feathers, mouth to beak,
    feet to flight!''

    In a blinding flash of light, my form dies away,
    and in its place, a phoenix fledgling,
    bright-eyed and cooing happily.
    Thyamra places me snugly onto her back,
    and she takes off into the sky.

    ''Ashke, my little one,
    you now are truly my son.
    Soon you will fly with me, and you will fly forever.
    Nevermore will there be the smell of ash and spices.
    Come, let us go and reside with Skyah our Father.''

    Together we burst through the clouds,
    soaring on into infinity.




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      Beautifu, a birds song can bring light to any dark corner and lift up a fallen spirit. Well done my friend, well done.
    | Posted on 2011-06-21 00:00:00 | by DUSTYTU | [ Reply to This ]
      Beautiful as usual my darling! I agree with you that the fourth is different in style, but it's in a good way. It's different only in the narrator's tone. It's the mixture of experience and knowledge, of love and adoration. It is first flight personified.

    I think it rare when someone captures a truly unique idea, and this my dear is unique. You have such a gift for creating and crafting inward expression to an outward form. I wholeheartedly admire your talent and love for the words you put to paper.

    Once again, another lovely write. I am never disappointed by your work.
    Yours truly,
    Clover
    | Posted on 2011-06-18 00:00:00 | by clovernfoxglove | [ Reply to This ]
      she nuzzles me with her beak and whispers sweet nothings, tells me everything will be alright if we fly under each other's wing and share our song.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-06-18 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      WOW Corey!!! I AM always very impressed with your talent in Word Smithing and YOU ARE AN ANGEL SINGING ~*~
    You've come a long way and you keep going and turning inward.

    I'm SUPER PROUD OF YOU COREY AND THIS IS A FAV!

    Love, Peace, Joy, Abundance, Beauty & Prosperous Healthy Smiles to Share ;-) ;-) ;-)
    | Posted on 2011-06-18 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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