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    dots Submission Name: Afternoondots
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    Author: Solomon Disease
    ASL Info:    101, male, earth
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 284/292/104
    Words: 76
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsAfternoondots
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    Remember that letter
    Reading between the lines
    Translating
    Finding meaning that wasn't meant
    Words stacked like tiles
    Looking in between the spaces
    The light seeps through
    Touches you
    You taste the thoughts
    Honey
    A loving gesture structured
    Just for me
    An afternoon delight
    Projecting pictures in your cinema
    Painting pictures in the theater of your mind
    A smile grows
    Your toes curl
    A warmth to take
    A gentle flame
    Cool to the touch
    A lover's name




    Submitted on 2011-06-17 09:06:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This has awesome, kickass flow.

    It is such a gentle and familiar piece.

    I really dig, the imagery and word choice I liked, the second line, seemed almost comedic, and opened up the rest of this.

    It seems to be about maybe overanalyzing things.
    | Posted on 2011-06-22 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      wow. i have no clue what this means, but i do. At the same time.its weird, normal. i cant decide. i thought the structure was fairly nice. cvould use some work though. good job!!
    | Posted on 2011-06-17 00:00:00 | by chiatealover | [ Reply to This ]


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