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    dots Submission Name: You Romanced me one last timedots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 123
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsYou Romanced me one last timedots
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    talking about slow dancing
    your best girl
    God I remember
    like I never want to remember

    the smell of the love
    the taste of a deep and sick pain for you

    I almost want to linger here
    and sway to the pain
    and the taste of your hate

    I almost don't want to get back up when this brings me to my knees
    Almost don't want to move on when I watch you walk away

    Or I can't stand to watch you walking away
    Can't stand to hear this sad song that could be about me and you

    But you insist on listening
    like it's got nothing to do with us
    insist on listening




    Submitted on 2011-06-17 13:01:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this reminds me of when i hear certain songs from the 60's and i remember my first love....and how we walked away from each other...even when there was still so much love there...realization came too late...so i try to think non-specifically when i hear those certain songs that seemed to have been recorded just for us...but alas, it is impossible...
    they always bring back certain moments...well, hell, it really is true of many songs since, and many past loves since....they bring back the feeling as clearly as if we were embracing to the song at this very moment, today...as the songs continue to play.
    | Posted on 2011-07-15 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      Sad. You capture the emotion of thinking about a lost love very well. I liked how you used your sense of smell and taste to describe the feelings of love and hate it makes the reader taste and smell what you're describing in their own unique way. Also, the feelings of not letting go - how the feelings of love still linger yet they are not mutual. Tasty sad poem :) . . . or :(, hehe
    | Posted on 2011-06-20 00:00:00 | by Solomon Disease | [ Reply to This ]
      Old flame toying with your emotions?


    I can relate to the emotion in this.

    "I almost want to linger here
    and sway to the pain
    and the taste of your hate"

    Too me, hate taste like blood. Bleeding is bad. Try not to do that. Speaking literaly of coarse.
    | Posted on 2011-06-17 00:00:00 | by snacky fish | [ Reply to This ]


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