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    dots Submission Name: Plumedots
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    Author: Clayman
    ASL Info:    28 - getting late
    Elite Ratio:    6.34 - 609/327/167
    Words: 70
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 371
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    dotsPlumedots
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    I won't kill you
    because you're not beautiful.
    I won't kill you
    because you're not whole.
    I have been killing you
    since you touched my soul.
    I have been killing you
    since you shunned all control.

    My heart balloons
    but there is no string.
    Cast me over volcanos,
    just a forgotten skin..

    Faster, faster blowing just..
    lonely sailor on tomorrow's gust.

    -Svw




    Submitted on 2011-06-18 17:11:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow! This was a powerful lyric and I could imagine a whole song playing in my head!

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    | Posted on 2011-06-20 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      my heart has gotten away from me...you are the volcano..and as i pass over you i will either pass over you or explode from your heat, and from my wanting you.
    i am like a lost ship now....aimlessly wandering in the gusts...

    i think she is beautiful and i think she is whole..but i think the speaker still tried to change her to suit his wants...we tend to do that....and when we do..that person breaks away...

    "if you love something let it go..maybe it will come back?" and maybe we will still be flying...hopefully we won't have been sucked into a volcano of regrets...
    perhaps our ship may find peaceful waters.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-06-18 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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