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    dots Submission Name: Sleeping Angels dots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 215
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsSleeping Angels dots
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    Should I crawl
    Craven with some filigree foot
    Hidden forever
    In the shadows of my own
    Innocuous phantom

    To spend the hours
    Amongst the esteem of cement and parchment
    Courting the grains of sand
    Clinging to the befuddled moss
    And wondering on the prisms caught
    In dew drops

    The dust I think
    This nighttime reminds me of
    Once the stars were made of

    And but for dreams
    Would scratch onto rock
    All that I was
    Every smile
    Every love
    Nailed into this crumbling stalwart
    And crunched on teeth
    The stones of its food

    Who
    The light flickers
    Who
    As nothing answers
    Save the rattle flicker
    Of celluloid theatre
    And on the image depicted
    This vast and written me
    In all those technicolours
    Of a dream

    Who
    There on this silver pixel screen

    It was a life
    Now etched in thumbnail scrapes
    Counting the seconds in
    The years
    The days


    And but for dreams
    Would I be scratched into brick
    All that made me
    That which I was
    Every smile
    Every love
    Nailed with the sleepwalking palms
    Stalwart crunching ever on the tooth
    The stones
    Of its food

    Who

    Who
    Who there tiptoed through the ranks
    Of sleeping angels




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      I have no idea what this is wholely about but I loved it.

    "who", indeed.

    People should read this slow and feel it out.

    "The dust I think
    This nighttime reminds me of
    Once the stars were made of"

    I like that part alot of much, however its very confusing.

    Hard to realy comment on this, its a nice piece yet difficult to understand. Which is absolutely fine I my book. If we realy cared if others understood our writes, then we would not write as we do.
    | Posted on 2011-06-21 00:00:00 | by snacky fish | [ Reply to This ]


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