[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav

  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav

    << | >>

    dots Submission Name: This I missdots

    Author: TiaanK
    ASL Info:    37/M/Dancing in the dark
    Elite Ratio:    4 - 22/27/28
    Words: 152
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 844
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1042


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsThis I missdots

    I miss you,
    I miss you so much

    Nothing feels the same
    To be honest,
    just about everything,
    feels like nothing
    I still haven't figured out
    and I still have my doubt,
    as to why there must be
    a bad end
    to every good endeavour
    I thought we were going to
    live forever?
    But reality hits hardest,
    when it hits you right at home
    So now I'm here,
    I miss your smile
    I miss your tears
    I miss comforting you
    I miss your scars and short comings
    I miss saying goodnight
    I miss hearing you say my name,
    and the way you said it
    I miss the time when everything felt right,
    and the future somehow seemed bright
    But most all,

    I miss your wings,
    wrapped around my heart
    Unconditional love,
    in love,
    in complete submissiveness
    This I miss

    - Tiaan Koekemoer 2011

    Submitted on 2011-06-20 14:18:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!

    ||| Comments |||

    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?


    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.




    User Name:


    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]

    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]

    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]